Wild horses

  Wild horses

One cold  rainy afternoon as the sun was setting an old man was driving his dump truck down the rough windey gravel track that was until a herd of wild horses leapt onto the track.       The horses were light brown with black manes and tails with shaggy coats. The old man swerved to the outer edge of the track. The back tyres over the edge of the track and the truck rolled down the bank and the old man died. The end.

Feedback from Mrs Hall: I liked the way you used detail words like windey, rough, shaggy and swerved. I shows me you thought about what you could see as you were describing what was happening.