k9 cops

 i like this book

Broken Wing

 Broken Wing:

Name of character:  hew
	Our inferences	Our evidence
Traits	Checy	He stole the fish back from the bird
Motives	He stole the fish back from the bird
Relationships
What changes

The mystery box

One cold winter morning at 9.00 o'clock Miss Hall entered the class. She carried a Mysterious bax as she entered the class. Miss carefully lowered the  box to the rough black and grey carpet. “What is in the box“! The class asked Miss Hall as two pups lept from the box onto the rough black and grey carpet. The pups are  German shepherds. As soon as the pups landed the class left their chairs to pat the pups.

The End.

Good writing Dylan: You have used punctuation correctly and used different sentence starters. Next time you could write more and have a problem in the story that needs resolving so that it adds more to your writing. 

reding

 reding was fun today.

Wild horses

  Wild horses

One cold  rainy afternoon as the sun was setting an old man was driving his dump truck down the rough windey gravel track that was until a herd of wild horses leapt onto the track.       The horses were light brown with black manes and tails with shaggy coats. The old man swerved to the outer edge of the track. The back tyres over the edge of the track and the truck rolled down the bank and the old man died. The end.

Feedback from Mrs Hall: I liked the way you used detail words like windey, rough, shaggy and swerved. I shows me you thought about what you could see as you were describing what was happening. 

 

maths

 we did maths in the 1st block.

dylan